[Dargon-writers-list] Grim Review: Stolen Thunder, draft 4

[Jon Evans]

Jim Owens wrote:
>                             Stolen Thunder
>                              By Jim Owens
>                           gymfuzz at yahoo.com
>                             Seber 1, 1018
>   

There are a few formatting errors, such as the following:

>      "You don't even know what it does," sniffed Josey,
>  and slipped off, 
> leaving Nessis to consider his newly-gotten wares.
>   

Other than those, I've always kind of liked this story.  Good job!  Fix 
those formats and it's RTP, IMO.

-grim

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